Great stuff! Thanks for all your hard work on this,
@Jonathan Edwards.
I have a mix of nitpicking stuff and more substantive comments.
Page 1
'Without known pathology 'multisystem' is unwarranted.' - Better with a comma after 'pathology'.
'...well illustrated in the Guideline text.' - Counterintuitively (I've had to look this issue up in the past), 'Guideline' should be lower case, even though it comes from a proper noun. To make it clearer, you could say, 'NICE guideline'.
'Firstly, people with ME/CFS have persistent unpleasant and disabling symptoms, varied and hard to describe...' - I'm a bit worried that this 'hard to describe' phrasing might be understood as 'hard to describe because they're not really proper recognisable symptoms, just figments of the patients' imaginations'.
I wondered whether it might be better not to abbreviate PEM, since the abbreviation gets defined early and then doesn't turn up again for so long that the reader might have forgotten what it means.
'...pathway specific drugs...' - Better as '...pathway-specific drugs...'?
'Unpleasant symptoms in ME/CFS include nausea, orthostatic intolerance, pain, (hence ‘malaise’)...' - I've always been confused about the definition of 'malaise', and this sentence also confused me. Are you saying that these things collectively are malaise? Or that pain is? I had thought that malaise was simply the feeling of being ill that you get when you have the flu - a sort of fluey ache - but maybe it isn't? I wouldn't have called nausea or OI or pain individually 'malaise'.
Page 3
'Clear clinical definition has allowed unproductive theories such as deconditioning cycles to been shown to be off target.' - Should be '...to have been shown...'.
Page 4
'...but its proponents have shown no recognition of their lack of understanding of either the illness or research methodology needed to identify effective treatment...' - Better as, '...but its proponents have shown no recognition of their lack of understanding of either the illness or
of the research methodology needed to identify effective treatment...'?
Title: 'Where is best placed to manage ME/CFS?' - Better as 'Who is placed...'?
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'The advantage of ME/CFS is that it is overtly a pragmatic compromise term...' - Can't remember if I've said this before but I'm not sure that it is overt that this is pragmatic . I wonder if it would be safer to say simply that it is a compromise term. (How annoying that the name for our illness is a compromise between two stupid things.)
'ME/CFS appears to be based on a process at the interface between central nervous and immune systems at a level that currently we have no way of modelling.' - The biomedical aspects of all this are way over my head but at the beginning you say, 'Without known pathology ‘multisystem’ is unwarranted. Despite frequent claims of metabolic or immunological changes nothing consistent has been found that would explain the clinical presentation.' Does your early statement that this is a CNS/immune system issue contradict this later statement that no consistent immunological changes have been found? I couldn't see the basis for the CNS/immune system claim (but as I said, over my head).
I hope this comments are helpful. This really is a superb piece of work and I hope it has a big effect on the right people.